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1. "Surface." - the breach, the fever-dream opener
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2. Instrumental - let the image settle
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3. Essay/documentary - the explanatory core, almost clinical, "semi-boring scientific" (this is where the concept gets stated plainly before the rest of the song complicates it)
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4. Instrumental + fragments - the logic starts dissolving
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4. Instrumental - going into the poemic verses
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5. Poem-ic verses - emotional density, maybe climax, maybe not
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6. P-U-L-S-E 5-liners - trademark closer, acrostic constraint
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7. Instrumental outro
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@@ -68,16 +68,23 @@ Acoustic aberrations dissipate
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// sahb - duwd - sao - nihk - skay - lahrs - vehk - tahr - rayz,
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// (ah - ) kaws - tihk - ax - bahr - ray - shaxns - dihs - sah - payt
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Spectral broadcast lossy with a narrow sight
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No perceived replies per design
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// needs further tweaking
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// --- stanza: the receiving end ---
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// the rover is also a receiver. dual nature - emitter and listener.
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// signals arrive occasionally. sparse, not a stream.
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// the rover knows others were lost - not reported, but inferred from being a transmitter yourself.
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// what arrives gets a grin. brief. acknowledging the crossing, not the content.
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// what didn't arrive is genuinely unknown. not mourned. the protocol doesn't carry that information.
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// tone: observational, not mournful. emotion doesn't assert itself - detectable only if you're paying attention.
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// could be more than a couplet. give it room if it needs room.
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// rhyme: lax, not strict. sonic texture matters more than scheme.
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The ocean as a desert buries all of its life
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Deck the shell with a perfect thermocline
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// (thax - ) ao - sheh(n) - naes - ax - deh - zahrt - bah - riys - ao(l) - lahv - ihts - layf
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// (dehk - thax - ) shehl - wit - ax - pahr - fekt - thahr - mow - klayn
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// 'deck the shell': intentional vagueness between 'decorate the outer shell' and 'knock on the border surface'.
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A dim light dies in the rover's eyes
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Light dims and dies in the rover's eyes
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Or the next one could never come otherwise
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// Thoughts: 'the light dies' because a pulse is mostly dormant you wanker. You have to let the light die so it lights up again, simple as
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