pulse: verses refinement
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@@ -65,34 +65,24 @@ An impulse signal, also referred to as a unit impulse, is defined as a signal wi
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// more 'rhythmic yelling' than singing, you get the idea
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Subdued sonic scalars vectorise
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Acoustic aberrations dissipate
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// sahb - duwd - sao - nihk - skay - lahrs - vehk - tahr - rayz,
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// (ah - ) kaws - tihk - ax - bahr - ray - shaxns - dihs - sah - payt
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// --- stanza: the receiving end ---
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// the rover is also a receiver. dual nature - emitter and listener.
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// signals arrive occasionally. sparse, not a stream.
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// the rover knows others were lost - not reported, but inferred from being a transmitter yourself.
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// what arrives gets a grin. brief. acknowledging the crossing, not the content.
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// what didn't arrive is genuinely unknown. not mourned. the protocol doesn't carry that information.
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// tone: observational, not mournful. emotion doesn't assert itself - detectable only if you're paying attention.
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// could be more than a couplet. give it room if it needs room.
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Agnostic funnel struck by a packet rain
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Fine-grained acknowledgements ground astray
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Isotropic funnel struck by a packet rain
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Fine-grained bags of acks ground astray
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Ocean as a desert buries all of its life
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Deck the shell with a perfect thermocline
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// (thax - ) ao - sheh(n) - naes - ax - deh - zahrt - bah - riys - ao(l) - lahv - ihts - layf
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// (dehk - thax - ) shehl - wit - ax - pahr - fekt - thahr - mow - klayn
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// 'deck the shell': intentional vagueness between 'decorate the outer shell' and 'knock on the border surface'.
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Dim light dead in the rover's eyes
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Dimmed light gone from the rover's eyes
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Or the next one could never fire otherwise
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// Thoughts: 'the light dies' because a pulse is mostly dormant you wanker. You have to let the light die so it lights up again, simple as
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// The image is good, the language isn't: too plain here.
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// Stay optical
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// ending verse(s) before the painfully long instrumental outro
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partial coldfront over a landlocked island
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unravels the illusion of independent
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unravels the illusionary legend of ziptie independency
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lamenting functions weave a zigzag pattern
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stablising fins break the rogue waves
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stabilising fins break the rogue waves
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essential sentiments left unconditionally permanent
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```
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