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 // Opener
 Surface. 
-The equilibrium of silence between the static magnetic noise, the watery planes, and the optical waves, 
-blurred electronic signs over the outbound informational motorway.
-Distant stations estimated [1] perform the collimation rite.
+The equilibrium of silence between the static magnetic noise, the watery planes, and the optical waves.  
+Blurred and mangled electronic signs over the outbound informational motorway.
+Distant stations estimated in abnormal heat perform the collimation rite.
 // think a submarine surfacing at night to do some radio comms as the starting point, then infuse it with a fever dream
 
 Dive.