efforts
This commit is contained in:
17
wip/pulse.md
17
wip/pulse.md
@@ -26,7 +26,7 @@ Literally, there can be long, essay-like, paragraphs (not too many) with structu
|
|||||||
1. "Surface." - the breach, the fever-dream opener
|
1. "Surface." - the breach, the fever-dream opener
|
||||||
2. Instrumental - let the image settle
|
2. Instrumental - let the image settle
|
||||||
3. Essay/documentary - the explanatory core, almost clinical, "semi-boring scientific" (this is where the concept gets stated plainly before the rest of the song complicates it)
|
3. Essay/documentary - the explanatory core, almost clinical, "semi-boring scientific" (this is where the concept gets stated plainly before the rest of the song complicates it)
|
||||||
4. Instrumental + fragments - the logic starts dissolving
|
4. Instrumental - going into the poemic verses
|
||||||
5. Poem-ic verses - emotional density, maybe climax, maybe not
|
5. Poem-ic verses - emotional density, maybe climax, maybe not
|
||||||
6. P-U-L-S-E 5-liners - trademark closer, acrostic constraint
|
6. P-U-L-S-E 5-liners - trademark closer, acrostic constraint
|
||||||
7. Instrumental outro
|
7. Instrumental outro
|
||||||
@@ -68,16 +68,23 @@ Acoustic aberrations dissipate
|
|||||||
// sahb - duwd - sao - nihk - skay - lahrs - vehk - tahr - rayz,
|
// sahb - duwd - sao - nihk - skay - lahrs - vehk - tahr - rayz,
|
||||||
// (ah - ) kaws - tihk - ax - bahr - ray - shaxns - dihs - sah - payt
|
// (ah - ) kaws - tihk - ax - bahr - ray - shaxns - dihs - sah - payt
|
||||||
|
|
||||||
Spectral broadcast lossy with a narrow sight
|
// --- stanza: the receiving end ---
|
||||||
No perceived replies per design
|
// the rover is also a receiver. dual nature - emitter and listener.
|
||||||
// needs further tweaking
|
// signals arrive occasionally. sparse, not a stream.
|
||||||
|
// the rover knows others were lost - not reported, but inferred from being a transmitter yourself.
|
||||||
|
// what arrives gets a grin. brief. acknowledging the crossing, not the content.
|
||||||
|
// what didn't arrive is genuinely unknown. not mourned. the protocol doesn't carry that information.
|
||||||
|
// tone: observational, not mournful. emotion doesn't assert itself - detectable only if you're paying attention.
|
||||||
|
// could be more than a couplet. give it room if it needs room.
|
||||||
|
// rhyme: lax, not strict. sonic texture matters more than scheme.
|
||||||
|
|
||||||
The ocean as a desert buries all of its life
|
The ocean as a desert buries all of its life
|
||||||
Deck the shell with a perfect thermocline
|
Deck the shell with a perfect thermocline
|
||||||
// (thax - ) ao - sheh(n) - naes - ax - deh - zahrt - bah - riys - ao(l) - lahv - ihts - layf
|
// (thax - ) ao - sheh(n) - naes - ax - deh - zahrt - bah - riys - ao(l) - lahv - ihts - layf
|
||||||
// (dehk - thax - ) shehl - wit - ax - pahr - fekt - thahr - mow - klayn
|
// (dehk - thax - ) shehl - wit - ax - pahr - fekt - thahr - mow - klayn
|
||||||
|
// 'deck the shell': intentional vagueness between 'decorate the outer shell' and 'knock on the border surface'.
|
||||||
|
|
||||||
A dim light dies in the rover's eyes
|
Light dims and dies in the rover's eyes
|
||||||
Or the next one could never come otherwise
|
Or the next one could never come otherwise
|
||||||
// Thoughts: 'the light dies' because a pulse is mostly dormant you wanker. You have to let the light die so it lights up again, simple as
|
// Thoughts: 'the light dies' because a pulse is mostly dormant you wanker. You have to let the light die so it lights up again, simple as
|
||||||
|
|
||||||
|
|||||||
Reference in New Issue
Block a user