From 8466004e92d04c1f00a13316ec20e146d9e5c6ac Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Wan Ziyu Date: Fri, 27 Feb 2026 16:46:59 +0900 Subject: [PATCH] efforts --- wip/pulse.md | 17 ++++++++++++----- 1 file changed, 12 insertions(+), 5 deletions(-) diff --git a/wip/pulse.md b/wip/pulse.md index ea2f1af..c74da50 100644 --- a/wip/pulse.md +++ b/wip/pulse.md @@ -26,7 +26,7 @@ Literally, there can be long, essay-like, paragraphs (not too many) with structu 1. "Surface." - the breach, the fever-dream opener 2. Instrumental - let the image settle 3. Essay/documentary - the explanatory core, almost clinical, "semi-boring scientific" (this is where the concept gets stated plainly before the rest of the song complicates it) -4. Instrumental + fragments - the logic starts dissolving +4. Instrumental - going into the poemic verses 5. Poem-ic verses - emotional density, maybe climax, maybe not 6. P-U-L-S-E 5-liners - trademark closer, acrostic constraint 7. Instrumental outro @@ -68,16 +68,23 @@ Acoustic aberrations dissipate // sahb - duwd - sao - nihk - skay - lahrs - vehk - tahr - rayz, // (ah - ) kaws - tihk - ax - bahr - ray - shaxns - dihs - sah - payt -Spectral broadcast lossy with a narrow sight -No perceived replies per design -// needs further tweaking +// --- stanza: the receiving end --- +// the rover is also a receiver. dual nature - emitter and listener. +// signals arrive occasionally. sparse, not a stream. +// the rover knows others were lost - not reported, but inferred from being a transmitter yourself. +// what arrives gets a grin. brief. acknowledging the crossing, not the content. +// what didn't arrive is genuinely unknown. not mourned. the protocol doesn't carry that information. +// tone: observational, not mournful. emotion doesn't assert itself - detectable only if you're paying attention. +// could be more than a couplet. give it room if it needs room. +// rhyme: lax, not strict. sonic texture matters more than scheme. The ocean as a desert buries all of its life Deck the shell with a perfect thermocline // (thax - ) ao - sheh(n) - naes - ax - deh - zahrt - bah - riys - ao(l) - lahv - ihts - layf // (dehk - thax - ) shehl - wit - ax - pahr - fekt - thahr - mow - klayn +// 'deck the shell': intentional vagueness between 'decorate the outer shell' and 'knock on the border surface'. -A dim light dies in the rover's eyes +Light dims and dies in the rover's eyes Or the next one could never come otherwise // Thoughts: 'the light dies' because a pulse is mostly dormant you wanker. You have to let the light die so it lights up again, simple as