pulse: minor updates
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@@ -76,17 +76,17 @@ Acoustic aberrations dissipate
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// what didn't arrive is genuinely unknown. not mourned. the protocol doesn't carry that information.
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// tone: observational, not mournful. emotion doesn't assert itself - detectable only if you're paying attention.
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// could be more than a couplet. give it room if it needs room.
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A remnant funnel struck by a packet rain
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Flimsy funnel struck by a packet rain
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Fine-grained acknowledgements ground astray
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The ocean as a desert buries all of its life
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Ocean as a desert buries all of its life
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Deck the shell with a perfect thermocline
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// (thax - ) ao - sheh(n) - naes - ax - deh - zahrt - bah - riys - ao(l) - lahv - ihts - layf
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// (dehk - thax - ) shehl - wit - ax - pahr - fekt - thahr - mow - klayn
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// 'deck the shell': intentional vagueness between 'decorate the outer shell' and 'knock on the border surface'.
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Light dims and dies in the rover's eyes
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Or the next one could never come otherwise
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Dim light fades from the rover's eyes
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Or the next one could never fire otherwise
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// Thoughts: 'the light dies' because a pulse is mostly dormant you wanker. You have to let the light die so it lights up again, simple as
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// ending verse(s) before the painfully long instrumental outro
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