From 60aeff3f2ce41e37c782ed4b9def8f3e2fbc2328 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Wan Ziyu Date: Wed, 1 Apr 2026 12:50:51 +0900 Subject: [PATCH] pulse: minor updates --- wip/pulse.md | 8 ++++---- 1 file changed, 4 insertions(+), 4 deletions(-) diff --git a/wip/pulse.md b/wip/pulse.md index 8bbe779..347f8d0 100644 --- a/wip/pulse.md +++ b/wip/pulse.md @@ -76,17 +76,17 @@ Acoustic aberrations dissipate // what didn't arrive is genuinely unknown. not mourned. the protocol doesn't carry that information. // tone: observational, not mournful. emotion doesn't assert itself - detectable only if you're paying attention. // could be more than a couplet. give it room if it needs room. -A remnant funnel struck by a packet rain +Flimsy funnel struck by a packet rain Fine-grained acknowledgements ground astray -The ocean as a desert buries all of its life +Ocean as a desert buries all of its life Deck the shell with a perfect thermocline // (thax - ) ao - sheh(n) - naes - ax - deh - zahrt - bah - riys - ao(l) - lahv - ihts - layf // (dehk - thax - ) shehl - wit - ax - pahr - fekt - thahr - mow - klayn // 'deck the shell': intentional vagueness between 'decorate the outer shell' and 'knock on the border surface'. -Light dims and dies in the rover's eyes -Or the next one could never come otherwise +Dim light fades from the rover's eyes +Or the next one could never fire otherwise // Thoughts: 'the light dies' because a pulse is mostly dormant you wanker. You have to let the light die so it lights up again, simple as // ending verse(s) before the painfully long instrumental outro